Nutella creates a vice for mothers to energize their children; providing nourishment in a joyful environment, while correlating sentimental nostalgia as a loving family enjoying a breakfast spread.
Good work. You should replace that semicolon with a comma. Remember, only use the semicolon if both clauses are independent (i.e. both complete sentences).
Also, instead of writing "Nutella creates a vice", focus on the image not the company by writing "Within the Nutella advertisement, blah blah blah....". However you want to phrase it. Just make sure the reader knows you are talking about the advertisement.
Good work. You should replace that semicolon with a comma. Remember, only use the semicolon if both clauses are independent (i.e. both complete sentences).
ReplyDeleteAlso, instead of writing "Nutella creates a vice", focus on the image not the company by writing "Within the Nutella advertisement, blah blah blah....". However you want to phrase it. Just make sure the reader knows you are talking about the advertisement.