Friday, August 3, 2012

Very Rough Draft


Obama Care: What Does This Mean For Us?

Four years ago, Barak Obama was elected as our 44th president. Two years later, he signed the Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act or, as more commonly known, Obama Care. Recently Obama Care was upheld, which brought a plethora of articles in the media, in turn causing a lot of commotion in the public. Many proclaimed that the bill is against their constitutional rights, retorting to move to Canada. I’m pretty sure they have universal health care for a while now.  Should we be outraged that our government is mandating universal health care? Well not outraged, but we should be concerned and informed. As college students, we have a lot to worry about when it comes to money as most of it goes to schooling. With the Obama Care, young adults are covered under their parents’ insurance until the age of 26.  This is a big help for a lot of people, considering most jobs a college have does not provide health benefits.  Obama Care pledges many positive assurances that caters to many Americans, but has a few exceptions and setbacks you should know about.
The Patient Protection and Affordable Care Act provides millions of people with coverage and expands Medicaid to citizens who are a little above the poverty level.  Obama Care also brings new rights, called the Patient Bill of Rights, for all citizens by setting higher standards to private insurance companies, and enforces citizens to have a means of health insurance by 2014. Americans without health insurance are required to purchase health care through the Healthcare for America Act or forced to pay a penalty.  The Act also mandates that private insurers cannot drop individuals with pre-existing conditions, protects your choice of doctor, and bans lifetime limits. Nutritional facts are also required in restaurants, which will help us take control of what we eat. In conjunction, preventive care to eligible citizens is also provided including: screenings for blood pressure, cholesterol, depression, type2 diabetes for adults with high blood pressure, HIV, and immunization vaccines.
As with many great things, there are hindrances to some due to the Affordable Care Act. By 2014, most citizens must have an insurance plan, without a plan they may be faced to pay an individual mandate tax of $95 or 1 percent of their taxable income and will rise slightly each year, according to The Ledger.  Obama Care also requires Americans who have an income of over 250k thousand dollars will have higher taxes to help supply cost of the bill.
The Obama Administration has done a lot to improve the quality of health for Americans. Clearly, as a country we are taking the right steps to better health care for ourselves and our future.

4 comments:

  1. I am sure I am not the only person in America who doesn't quite understand the specifications of Obama care and the new healthcare reform. Therefore, I enjoyed enhancing my knowledge about the subject. But possibly try to include more sources in your editorial so your audience doesn't think you plagiarized.

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  2. Your grammar and structure is very good. The only thing I noticed was that Obamacare is normally represented as one word but you show it as two. You definitely need more content to get to three pages but you seem to have a lot of information. If you do need more you should look up the Congressional Budget Office reports. Keep up the good work.

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  3. It was an interesting article. If you need more, you could also try to address the counter argument more and refute it.

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  4. You write, "Obama Care was upheld'. Be more specific about what that means. Upheld by whom and against what?

    Your organization is sort of like an academic paper. You start broadly and introduce the topic, state a thesis, support that thesis in bigger paragraphs with topic sentences and have a short conclusion. But this is not how editorials are organized. This organization can be dry and predictable. Try to mix it up. How can you make this argument best suite the needs and interests of your reader?

    The biggest problem is that you have not cited any sources. You must cite, in text, any information you learned from other sources. You must also have a works cited page.

    Next, I would settle with a more modest argument, that we need to be informed about the changes. You also make a claim, toward the end, that this is a significant progress. I feel that way. A lot of people feel that way. But you don't have the space to develop that argument with evidence. You are absolutely encouraged to say that you feel thankful/hopeful for this new law. However, without also providing evidence, you should keep that as a statement of personal opinion.

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